<Dear elevator>
Elevator, you make many memories.
You make me excited,
You make me fretful,
And you give me thrills.
How can you make these feelings?
Elevator, you make me excited.
When I go to eat lunch, you carry me to the cafeteria.
When I go to study, you carry me to a free study room.
When I go to bed, you carry me to the 9th floor.
I really love these times,.
when you carry me there, I feel excited.
Elevator, you make me fretful.
In the morning, I have to go study.
WE must go out of our rooms by 8:20 but,
I feel that I'll be late. I mutter to you.
'Please....hurry...hurry...hurry....HURRY UP!!!'
You pretend to be cute so, sometimes you come to the 9th floor quickly but,
sometimes you come slowly. By the way, you always carry me 1 floor by 8:19.
Elevator, you give me thrills.
In the elevator, people talk with me.
I meet my friends and I am glad to meet them.
Of course we talk in English but sometimes we talk in Korean.
We share funny stories.
At that time, you warn to me,
"This floor, PAs will get on here."
And really, PAs come into elevator.
Sometimes I didn't hear your voice and PAs discover using Korean.
Then we will recieve an EOP card.
But I don't worry because you warn me.
Elevator, I hope to get many things from you.
Sometimes I want to move fast, sometimes I want to move slowly.
Once in a while, I want you to stop.
(You stop when I am not in there.)
But you listen to my voice and everyday come to me.
I think I'm grateful to you.
Lunch is coming, please come to me quickly!
Sincerely, Joanne.
Joanne,
답글삭제This is a good ode, it is well-written and descriptive. I think you should use more personifications and metaphors though to make it more poetic.
This is very poetic and I really agree with you!!
답글삭제Hi!
답글삭제It is a great ode and I enjoyed reading this ode to the elevator. This ode is very descriptive, but you have to try to use more personifications and metaphors. Keep up the good work~
-Yongwook, Oh (Writing TA)
Hmm.. frankly, I didn't really read it. But I assume that it's good. And based on Miss Angela's comment, not enough poetic factors. Anyway, keep your pace!
답글삭제J